Essay 6 Graphic Organizer and Essay

Ben’jamin
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
19/10/10

Main Point of Essay: Seeing ones self
Bell word: within

Opening
Hook: surgery, look within someone
Comment: Literal vs. figurative
Comment: Mirrors
Thesis: People see all different types of things within themselves when looking in a mirror

Body Paragraph 1
Echo: Inside, innermost
Topic Sentence: Characters in TOTC looking in mirrors
Support 1: Lucie: What might she see
Commentary: Worried face
Commentary: Helpfulness and maturity
Support 2: What might Doc Manette see
Commentary: Lost time
Commentary: Mystery
Support 3: What might Mr. Lorry see
Commentary: Money
Commentary: Lonely
Concluding Sentence: Good friends see different things

Body Paragraph 2
Echo: viscera, intramural
Topic Sentence: To look within oneself
Support 1: Unhappiness
Commentary: I please others before myself
Commentary: Miss Pross
Support 2: Desperation
Commentary: I don’t know me
Commentary: Overwhelmed
Support 3: Finesse
Commentary: Always take the longer path
Commentary: Make everything harder than it needs to be
Concluding: Need to be careful

Hook: You could see anything
Commentary: Hate vs. like
Commentary: Depress or please
Concluding: Mirrors are dangerous things

A Mirror’s Eye:
An Essay on Seeing Inside Oneself with a Mirror

(TS) One way to see within yourself is to have someone perform surgery on you. (CM) This of coarse is the literal way as appose o the figurative way which is much harder and much cheaper. (CM) Sometimes, to see inside ourselves, we really need to see ourselves, and what better way to see yourself than with a mirror. (TH) Different people might see all kinds of different things when looking in their golden framed mirrors.

(TS) If some of Charles Dickens characters from A Tale of Two Cities were to look in a mirror, I am sure that they would all see different things. (SD) If Lucie Manette looked into a beautifully crafted pier-glass positioned in a dark, well decorated room of oak, she would see a beautiful face, starring back, but she also might see something else. (CM) If Lucie Manette starred into a mirror, she might simply see fear, for Lucie is often scared for the safety and security of her friends; very infrequently does she care for herself before others, especially those who she is close to, cares for, and loves very much. (Subordinating cumulative sentence (47 words)) (CM) Lucie is a very loving person, and many people love her too, but she is so helpful and modest that if she looked into a mirror, she might only see the face of an old man, or a wild women, or a disgruntled man of business. (SD) If someone, who had missed most of their life, wondering aimlessly, not knowing where to go, looked into a cracked and broken mirror, hung on a cold stone cell wall by a bending and rusting nail, they might see nothing at all. (CM) This man might have someone dear to him, but because he does not know her, he might feel like his time has passed. (CM) A lost man looks into a mirror hoping to be able to look back on the life they could have had, but have lost. (SD) Now, lets say Mr. Lorry looked into a square mirror, just large enough to fit the head of the looker. (CM) He might see efficiency starring back at him with colorless but beautiful eyes. (CM) Perhaps, he might see loneliness, for the money he worked so hard to get for Telsons has not gotten him any companion in which he might love. (CS) It is ironic how these good friends Dickens planned and perfected are oh so different, especially in the eyes of a mirror.

(TS) Different people might see different things when staring into a mirror, and I see very different things from most of Dickens’s characters might see. (SD) When I stare into a mirror, I often see a pair of unhappy green eyes looking gloomily back. (CM) The only person in Tale of Two Cities that my understand my problem would be Miss Pross for we have the exact same problem. (CM) I am such a complicated person, so different from those I surround myself with, I find it much easier to please everyone else before even contemplating what I might want to do, and because of this, I often find myself with the absence of happiness. (SD) I might also see an open, desperate mouth, gasping for air, for I am a very desperate person. (CM) I am a very confused person, and sometimes I don’t know what I want to do, and this leaves me desperate, looking around anxiously for hope. (CM) I am also desperate for a brake because I never stop moving; I am always doing something and I am desperate for a time to rest. (SD) I also might see, but not always, some sort of finesse, not literally, but finesse hangs around me like a misty, good smelling, but toxic mist. (CM) Finesse always takes me the long way and I often find my self looking down the longer, steeper and rougher trail when a perfectly good flat road of cobblestone lies to the other side, incurving, and staying flat, but many pass along this road, and it has turned grey and worn, and I would much rather turn my head to the path overgrown with exuberant colors and flowers. (CM) However, under the bright mountains blooms lies a thicket of thorny Fabaceae making the trek much harder than it need be. (CS) I need to be careful because my unhappy and finesse mood leads me to desperation which will lead me to no good.