Ben’jamin
I was told that I have two minutes, and the clock is ticking. So much I want to say, so little time to say it in, so all I will say is this: thank you. Thank you Mr. T, for you were my first teacher, and taught me to read. Thank you Ms. Newberry, who taught me that’s it’s not all about me. Thank you Mrs. T, who taught me how to be quiet, and thank you Mrs. Smith, who taught me how to write. Also thank you to Ms. Shay, who taught me to tie my shoes, and thank you Ms. Mitchell, who taught me how to be polite. Thank you Mrs. Iacoi who taught me how to draw, and Ms. Martin, who taught me to sing. I want to thank Ms. Williams, who taught me how to dance, and Ms. Davis, who taught me how to play. Thank you also Ms. Crawford, who taught me math, and how drive, and also to Ms. David, who taught me of the world. Thank you Ms.Raf, who taught me that chocolate is a vegetable, and also to Mrs. Mortrude, who taught me what words are good words to write with. Thank you Ms. Cogan, who taught me that you cant make a triangle with two right angles no matter how hard you try, and thanks to Ms. Bennet, who taught me about electricity. Thank you Mr. D for you taught me about sports and staying fit, and thank you Mrs. Lozis, who taught me how to sing in a group. Thank you about Ms. Long, who taught me the history of our country, and thank you Ms. Pattenden, who taught me about Earth. Thank you Ms. Roper, who taught me how to make a good sentence, and thank you Mr. Brown, who taught me about ancient history, and Ms. Rice who taught me about Latin. Thank you Mrs. Call, who taught me about the environment, and also to Dok, who taught me how to build a building. Thank you Mr. Mitchell, who taught me how to study, and thank you to Ms. Owen, who taught me how to graph. Thank you Mr. Dolfin, who taught me Spanish as well as football, and to Madame Halburg for, even though I never had you, you taught my classmates French. Mr. Williams who took care of me in Honduras as well as Zack in Japan, And thank you Mr. Salsich, for you have lifted me off the ground, and taught me how to write an essay. Thank you Mr. Hannon, who taught me about business, as well as Mr. Cruthers, who taught me about the real high five. Thank you Mrs. Maureen, who taught me how to deliverer a message, and thank you Mr. Ringer, who taught me when it is right to make a good joke. Thank you Ms. Abbiati, who taught me to cook, and thank you Mr. Hurtgen, who taught me how to lead. Thank you nurse Sharon who kept me healthy. Thank you mom and dad, for you have taken me through thick and thin, keeping my ankles dry as you wade through the marsh. Thank you Zack, who broke the ice thousand times before me. Thank you friends who made me laugh when I was down. Thank you Mr. Guise, for you saw me through these 12 years. Thank you teachers, who made me how I am, and thank you Pine Point, for being who you are.
Wednesday, May 18, 2011
Monday, May 2, 2011
Graduation Poem-2
There is joy in my eye
But there is also sadness
Here in my eye at this moment
For now I say "later"
Now I leave forever
But my spirit shall live on
My life shall stay, my word I swear on
See the truth in the glint of my eye
That I intend to stay forever
As to keep away the sadness
Eventually, I will fade, but later
for I shall stay at this moment
When I disappear one moment
I, you must not give up on
For I shall return, later
I shall be gone, for just the blink of an eye
So do not be sad
For nothing is forever
I will live on with this school forever
Until the moment
When all the world tumbles over, then be sad
Memories of us shall always live on
The memories of you and I.
As the sun sets, time getting later and later.
My time goes late
The time I thought would last forever
But maybe I
Wasted all these moments
Maybe I will have nothing to look back on
But what a fate that would be, so sad.
But I know my past will not be sad,
I know it will not just be the later
I know Pine Point will live on,
For I have friends that last forever
And far behond this moment
As strong and calm, as the nights eye
When I look back on my memories, I will not be sad.
I will not fade, my time is later.
My time is forever, not just this moment.
But there is also sadness
Here in my eye at this moment
For now I say "later"
Now I leave forever
But my spirit shall live on
My life shall stay, my word I swear on
See the truth in the glint of my eye
That I intend to stay forever
As to keep away the sadness
Eventually, I will fade, but later
for I shall stay at this moment
When I disappear one moment
I, you must not give up on
For I shall return, later
I shall be gone, for just the blink of an eye
So do not be sad
For nothing is forever
I will live on with this school forever
Until the moment
When all the world tumbles over, then be sad
Memories of us shall always live on
The memories of you and I.
As the sun sets, time getting later and later.
My time goes late
The time I thought would last forever
But maybe I
Wasted all these moments
Maybe I will have nothing to look back on
But what a fate that would be, so sad.
But I know my past will not be sad,
I know it will not just be the later
I know Pine Point will live on,
For I have friends that last forever
And far behond this moment
As strong and calm, as the nights eye
When I look back on my memories, I will not be sad.
I will not fade, my time is later.
My time is forever, not just this moment.
Thursday, April 28, 2011
Graduation Poem-1
Ben’jamin Dameron
The End:
I can’t believe its over; I watched the whole thing through,
Ten years fade, as I approach the immanent the epic end.
I am not leaving any friends, I am leaving family.
But I must know if I do in fact stay here
I want to know if I will see tears of blue
If this really is the last goodbye
How painful it is to say goodbye
To say it, the whole word through
I watch, I my mood will soon turn blue,
When I say goodbye at the end.
I will say it here
Here I say goodbye to my family
I say my family
I say “goodbye”
In the lonely month of June I say it here
The bad times as well as the good you have brought me through
But I must say goodbye, because I know it’s the end
And the tears will fall, pure and blue.
But let there be hope, for we do not melt with the tears of blue
As I look upon you all, my family
And I see the love, and no its not the final end
The end must begin with goodbye
In thick and thin we must still travel through
And it all starts today, here
I know goodbye is not what you want to hear
You do not want to be sad and blue
These hard times you do not want to go through
You do not want to leave your family
But that not what it is about: “goodbye”
It is about what happened in the beginning and what will happen, but not the end
When you lay helpless and dying in a land beyond ours, that is the end
But simply saying goodbye here?
It is just a effortless word “goodbye”
As simple as the word blue
No, we will stay together as a family
And this world we will go through
I say goodbye, but only to this stories end
Through many more stories we see, though maybe not here
There is no need to be blue, for we say not goodbye, for we are all family
The End:
I can’t believe its over; I watched the whole thing through,
Ten years fade, as I approach the immanent the epic end.
I am not leaving any friends, I am leaving family.
But I must know if I do in fact stay here
I want to know if I will see tears of blue
If this really is the last goodbye
How painful it is to say goodbye
To say it, the whole word through
I watch, I my mood will soon turn blue,
When I say goodbye at the end.
I will say it here
Here I say goodbye to my family
I say my family
I say “goodbye”
In the lonely month of June I say it here
The bad times as well as the good you have brought me through
But I must say goodbye, because I know it’s the end
And the tears will fall, pure and blue.
But let there be hope, for we do not melt with the tears of blue
As I look upon you all, my family
And I see the love, and no its not the final end
The end must begin with goodbye
In thick and thin we must still travel through
And it all starts today, here
I know goodbye is not what you want to hear
You do not want to be sad and blue
These hard times you do not want to go through
You do not want to leave your family
But that not what it is about: “goodbye”
It is about what happened in the beginning and what will happen, but not the end
When you lay helpless and dying in a land beyond ours, that is the end
But simply saying goodbye here?
It is just a effortless word “goodbye”
As simple as the word blue
No, we will stay together as a family
And this world we will go through
I say goodbye, but only to this stories end
Through many more stories we see, though maybe not here
There is no need to be blue, for we say not goodbye, for we are all family
Monday, April 25, 2011
Final Project
Ben’jamin
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
25/4/11
Dear Reader,
What you are about to read is the outcome of two long and hard years of English Class. I had just over a month to work on this paper, so you can expect it to be perfect. This essay is about a topic that I actually feel very strongly about: the strength of spirit. I will not say anymore on that topic as to keep the discussion to my essay. This is however a multigenre essay, meaning that I will be writing in four different genres not including a standard eleven sentence paragraph. In this essay, I will discuss the strength of spirit throughout history including from William Shakespeare’s Julius Caesar and in A Tale of Two Cities. I will use examples displaying strength of spirit from leaders such as Martin Luther King, Nelson Mandela, and some others. I hope you enjoy this piece of work, for this is my last essay I will write at Pine Point after ten years. Thank you.
Sincerely
Ben’jamin Dameron
Strength of Spirit is the basis of all life. Everything we want to do, whether we do it or not, is determined by our strength of spirit. We have complete control of everything we do in life, and whether we want to do it or not. Then it is up to our will if we want to do it; this is our body, our mind, our life, we make the decisions. Some people do have more spirit than others. Not all minds are the same, and this is what makes us unique, and it is the mind that controls the will. As long as we are unique, we will differ in everyway, including our strength of spirit. If you are not making decisions, you are not living, and this is all based on our strength of spirit. If we are not making decisions, what are we doing, we are just auto pilot, not thinking, just registering, and responding without any thought process. As long as we are in some sort of contact withProxy-Connection: keep-alive
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he world, and we are ever thinking about what we are in contact with, we are using our will do make decisions, and then living the life.
You can lock me up,
Put me away,
Shut me up,
Or keep me at bay.
Treat me as a pup,
Treat me ill for a day
But I won’t stop
Put me behind walls
Call in the cop
Shoot me with balls
But my dreams you will not chop
For my strength is greater
Than any iron sword
And my will is straighter
Than any thick iron cord
So don’t try to slow me down
You’ll only hurt yourself
Make you look like a clown
You’ll look small as an elf
For my strength of spirit
Is wise and mighty
Don’t you hear it
It is the sound of the almighty
A Letter Home
Dear Mother,
My situation grows worse by the hour. I have no idea how I am going to be able to continue to cope with the magnitude of my condition. My vision is fogged and smudged like finger prints on eye glasses, and I am having an increasing problem seeing my way to the end. I no longer see the path I should take, I simply feel it. But do not worry about me, I am ok, for you can not see your strength of spirit, yet you know its there. I can not see the dark black road below my feet, or the yellow line that carves into the shadows of the future, yet I know it is there.
Mother, you must write back quickly because I know not what to do. I am not strong enough to face the villains, my fears, behind me, but I am strong enough to plunge into the dark pool of blackness in front of my eyes, yet, I do not know what will become of me if I continue to wade through the smog and muck of this challenge. I try to get help, from truck drivers going by, but they do not see me, they see only a coward, a small boy running from the dark. They do not know me, if they knew me, they would know I am running from the light, running from what I know, then only thing I know. The dark has promised me a new beginning, but know not whether I can trust the dark, for I know it has a tendency to lie, to lure you in with fake pledges, only to close his sharp jaws on your shoelace, and you can not escape, so you and your shoe are stuck forever. But I fear what I left more than I fear the dark, more than I fear being cold, and being hurt. I fear being alone more than being surrounded by creatures that want to hurt me. I need to know what to do. I can’t continue on like this, but I dare not turn my eyes. As I stare forward, I forget, and my troubles are not but stone statues, locked in the rays of the sun, but the second I turn, they become weeping angles, ready to snap my neck the moment I blink, yet I shall forget them the second I turn my back. I am scared to see their faces, the faces of my fears, but I know that if I keep walking into the unknown, I shall see them come out of the dark. Please mother please, tell me what to do, for I lack the will to make a decision. You have always been strong with spirit, and know what to do, so please, be my flame, and guide me through the dark.
Love
Your Son
Strength of spirit is all about our thoughts on what is morally correct. The spirit is what we believe to be morally correct, and the strength is how strongly we believe in it. Someone who has no moral beliefs has absolutely no strength of spirit. It is not an simple stream of endless strength that we choose to use or not, it is a complicated analysis on events and our thoughts on if those events are just and then how we react to the. However, there is only so much you can do with it. If you lock someone up, yes they can use their voice and communicate with those outside, but if someone is in complete isolation, with no way out, there is nothing they can do, and no amount of strength will break though. Yes it is nice to think rosy thoughts that good will always prevail, but if you are smart enough, and strong enough, and powerful enough, you could potentially silence a morally strong person. Strength of spirit is the basis of all emotion and all life, but it is not all powerful. We all have some sort of strength, but some amounts more than others. Strength of spirit has thousands of interpretations, and this is only mine, though this topic will be disputed for all of time, through all of space, till ever more.
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
25/4/11
Dear Reader,
What you are about to read is the outcome of two long and hard years of English Class. I had just over a month to work on this paper, so you can expect it to be perfect. This essay is about a topic that I actually feel very strongly about: the strength of spirit. I will not say anymore on that topic as to keep the discussion to my essay. This is however a multigenre essay, meaning that I will be writing in four different genres not including a standard eleven sentence paragraph. In this essay, I will discuss the strength of spirit throughout history including from William Shakespeare’s Julius Caesar and in A Tale of Two Cities. I will use examples displaying strength of spirit from leaders such as Martin Luther King, Nelson Mandela, and some others. I hope you enjoy this piece of work, for this is my last essay I will write at Pine Point after ten years. Thank you.
Sincerely
Ben’jamin Dameron
Strength of Spirit is the basis of all life. Everything we want to do, whether we do it or not, is determined by our strength of spirit. We have complete control of everything we do in life, and whether we want to do it or not. Then it is up to our will if we want to do it; this is our body, our mind, our life, we make the decisions. Some people do have more spirit than others. Not all minds are the same, and this is what makes us unique, and it is the mind that controls the will. As long as we are unique, we will differ in everyway, including our strength of spirit. If you are not making decisions, you are not living, and this is all based on our strength of spirit. If we are not making decisions, what are we doing, we are just auto pilot, not thinking, just registering, and responding without any thought process. As long as we are in some sort of contact withProxy-Connection: keep-alive
Cache-Control: max-age=0
he world, and we are ever thinking about what we are in contact with, we are using our will do make decisions, and then living the life.
You can lock me up,
Put me away,
Shut me up,
Or keep me at bay.
Treat me as a pup,
Treat me ill for a day
But I won’t stop
Put me behind walls
Call in the cop
Shoot me with balls
But my dreams you will not chop
For my strength is greater
Than any iron sword
And my will is straighter
Than any thick iron cord
So don’t try to slow me down
You’ll only hurt yourself
Make you look like a clown
You’ll look small as an elf
For my strength of spirit
Is wise and mighty
Don’t you hear it
It is the sound of the almighty
A Letter Home
Dear Mother,
My situation grows worse by the hour. I have no idea how I am going to be able to continue to cope with the magnitude of my condition. My vision is fogged and smudged like finger prints on eye glasses, and I am having an increasing problem seeing my way to the end. I no longer see the path I should take, I simply feel it. But do not worry about me, I am ok, for you can not see your strength of spirit, yet you know its there. I can not see the dark black road below my feet, or the yellow line that carves into the shadows of the future, yet I know it is there.
Mother, you must write back quickly because I know not what to do. I am not strong enough to face the villains, my fears, behind me, but I am strong enough to plunge into the dark pool of blackness in front of my eyes, yet, I do not know what will become of me if I continue to wade through the smog and muck of this challenge. I try to get help, from truck drivers going by, but they do not see me, they see only a coward, a small boy running from the dark. They do not know me, if they knew me, they would know I am running from the light, running from what I know, then only thing I know. The dark has promised me a new beginning, but know not whether I can trust the dark, for I know it has a tendency to lie, to lure you in with fake pledges, only to close his sharp jaws on your shoelace, and you can not escape, so you and your shoe are stuck forever. But I fear what I left more than I fear the dark, more than I fear being cold, and being hurt. I fear being alone more than being surrounded by creatures that want to hurt me. I need to know what to do. I can’t continue on like this, but I dare not turn my eyes. As I stare forward, I forget, and my troubles are not but stone statues, locked in the rays of the sun, but the second I turn, they become weeping angles, ready to snap my neck the moment I blink, yet I shall forget them the second I turn my back. I am scared to see their faces, the faces of my fears, but I know that if I keep walking into the unknown, I shall see them come out of the dark. Please mother please, tell me what to do, for I lack the will to make a decision. You have always been strong with spirit, and know what to do, so please, be my flame, and guide me through the dark.
Love
Your Son
Strength of spirit is all about our thoughts on what is morally correct. The spirit is what we believe to be morally correct, and the strength is how strongly we believe in it. Someone who has no moral beliefs has absolutely no strength of spirit. It is not an simple stream of endless strength that we choose to use or not, it is a complicated analysis on events and our thoughts on if those events are just and then how we react to the. However, there is only so much you can do with it. If you lock someone up, yes they can use their voice and communicate with those outside, but if someone is in complete isolation, with no way out, there is nothing they can do, and no amount of strength will break though. Yes it is nice to think rosy thoughts that good will always prevail, but if you are smart enough, and strong enough, and powerful enough, you could potentially silence a morally strong person. Strength of spirit is the basis of all emotion and all life, but it is not all powerful. We all have some sort of strength, but some amounts more than others. Strength of spirit has thousands of interpretations, and this is only mine, though this topic will be disputed for all of time, through all of space, till ever more.
Tuesday, April 19, 2011
Essay 19
Ben’jamin
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
19/4/11
The Potent:
An Essay on Strong Characters in Julius Caesar
In the world of reality, there are many different weaknesses and strengths someone can possess. Some people have more of these curses, both vigor and flaws, than others, for example, “[Mark Twain] has every human strength! and weakness.” (Albert Bigelow Paine, 89) However, most of us have our fair shares of strengths and weaknesses. William Shakespeare has a definite talent at making his fictional characters seem as if they were figures of reality by giving them very real strengths and weaknesses.
Shakespeare’s characters, fake and surreal, are quite real due to him giving them strengths as well as weaknesses. Brutus has a definite strength with wisdom, a rare characteristics among the obdurate Romans. Brutus’ endurance and patience is, in fact, what keeps the conspirators from being discovered from higher powers. He has also proved valuable in selecting trustworthy people to help in the assassination effort. However, not all Romans can be blessed with wisdom; for instance, Cassius mistakes what is his bravery and strength with his ego and stubbornness. He believes that he is one who has battled the gods and won when all he actually did was run through the storm. He rants on about how he saw the gods in this storm, but truly, he seemed more foolish than brave. However, I do not mean that the Romans were a bumbling crowd of idiotic vagabonds. Caesar is the bravest among the characters in Julius Caesar. He took absolute control of Rome in a trying time. He knew that there would be people would not like him for killing the former emperor, but he took power anyway, chancing the consequences. What really makes Julius Caesar such a great play, are the eccentricity of all of Shakespeare’s characters.
It’s the characters that make Shakespeare’s play. Caesar’s bold move to take control of the empire shows great courage by the Roman. Cassius has mistaken bravery with foolishness that has been hidden under his ego, and Brutus’ strength has really saved the conspirators from being discovered. We all have different strengths and weaknesses, for this is part of what makes us human.
Self Assessment
1. What is one strength in this essay?
I worked hard on my fast words and I think my vocabulary makes the essay
2. What is one weakness you see in this essay?
I don’t really see any weakness in this essay, I love the whole thing
3. What is one issue that you are continuing to work on?
I’m trying really hard to get the special effects in my writing, but I think I did that very well in this essay
4. A
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
19/4/11
The Potent:
An Essay on Strong Characters in Julius Caesar
In the world of reality, there are many different weaknesses and strengths someone can possess. Some people have more of these curses, both vigor and flaws, than others, for example, “[Mark Twain] has every human strength! and weakness.” (Albert Bigelow Paine, 89) However, most of us have our fair shares of strengths and weaknesses. William Shakespeare has a definite talent at making his fictional characters seem as if they were figures of reality by giving them very real strengths and weaknesses.
Shakespeare’s characters, fake and surreal, are quite real due to him giving them strengths as well as weaknesses. Brutus has a definite strength with wisdom, a rare characteristics among the obdurate Romans. Brutus’ endurance and patience is, in fact, what keeps the conspirators from being discovered from higher powers. He has also proved valuable in selecting trustworthy people to help in the assassination effort. However, not all Romans can be blessed with wisdom; for instance, Cassius mistakes what is his bravery and strength with his ego and stubbornness. He believes that he is one who has battled the gods and won when all he actually did was run through the storm. He rants on about how he saw the gods in this storm, but truly, he seemed more foolish than brave. However, I do not mean that the Romans were a bumbling crowd of idiotic vagabonds. Caesar is the bravest among the characters in Julius Caesar. He took absolute control of Rome in a trying time. He knew that there would be people would not like him for killing the former emperor, but he took power anyway, chancing the consequences. What really makes Julius Caesar such a great play, are the eccentricity of all of Shakespeare’s characters.
It’s the characters that make Shakespeare’s play. Caesar’s bold move to take control of the empire shows great courage by the Roman. Cassius has mistaken bravery with foolishness that has been hidden under his ego, and Brutus’ strength has really saved the conspirators from being discovered. We all have different strengths and weaknesses, for this is part of what makes us human.
Self Assessment
1. What is one strength in this essay?
I worked hard on my fast words and I think my vocabulary makes the essay
2. What is one weakness you see in this essay?
I don’t really see any weakness in this essay, I love the whole thing
3. What is one issue that you are continuing to work on?
I’m trying really hard to get the special effects in my writing, but I think I did that very well in this essay
4. A
Wednesday, April 6, 2011
Essay 18
Ben’jamin
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
6/4/11
Essay 18 Outline
TS What might you call a master of a profession
CM Answer Question
CM Explain Fate as a profession
TH Once we are set free from our mothers arms, the eye of blame can only look upon one
person, you.
TS Once given to the world, we are masters (what of the time before)
SD Childhood fears
CM My fear of needles
CM My fear of being alone
SD Childhood strengths
CM Climbing
CM Acting
SD Families position in life
CM Money
CM Where we live
CS Are personality is out of control,
TS Once we are “free”, we are masters of fate
SD “Once we are free”=in charge of our lives
CM We are in charge of every choice we make
CM No one there to guide us up the stairs
SD Ever decision has an impact
CM Thousands of choices everyday
CM What I eat for breakfast could impact my day
SD We are masters of our fate for better or for worse
CM Our choices could lead us to success
CM Our choices could lead us to the bottom stages of the world
CS After a few short years of “training” we do become masters of our own fates
TS There comes a time, right after childhood, when the only person you can blame for
your mistakes is yourself
CM We have to take full advantage of the early stages of life
CM Once we leave home, we are on our own
CS The safety is off, we most climb alone
Crack of Luck
An Essay on how People are “Masters of our Fates”
“Why, man, doth he bestride the narrow world,
Like a colossus, and we petty men
Walk under his huge legs, peeping about
To find ourselves dishonorable graves.
Men at some time are masters of their fates.
The fault, dear Brutus, is not in the starts,
But in ourselves, that we are underlings.”
-Cassius in Julius Caesar-William Shakespeare
Act 1 Scene 2 Lines 142-148
The millions of decisions we make in one day, life changing or unnoticeable, affect the path that our life travels. That flow of decisions under our stone bridge will, once again, overflow with endless decisions, some good, some bad. The influences we come across every day affect who we are, but are not the deciding factor of our lives. Only our minds, for those of us who have found our voice, can be the master of our fates.
What might you call a master of a kingdom, a master of an academic subject, the master
of a business, the master of an army, or what might you call the master of ship, or the
master of a school, or even, what might you call the master of fate. The master of a
kingdom is a king, the master of a subject is a professor, the master of a business is
a CEO, the master of an army is a general, and you might call the master of a ship a
captain, and the master of a school the principle. All these are professions, and each of
those people can do their job to perfection, but none of them can do the others job, so
what might you call the master of Fate; humans. Once that we, humans, people, leave the safety of our mothers arms, we are at the mercy of the world, but we are in total control of our lives, whether we realize it or not.
We are free once we are given to the world, but what of the time before, because this is where we have little to no control. I have childhood fears that now impact my decisions now. When I was incredibly younger than I am now, I was, against my will, unwillingly dragged to a hospital where my brother had a mole removed, but that is not the whole story, because my mom was supposed to put cream on the mole so that they could remove it with out any pain. My mom put tape over the cream so it wouldn’t come off, but the doctor had to take off the bandage to get the mole, and when they did that my brother was in a lot of pain. There I was sitting in the corner of the operation room with my brother, needles all over his face, blood dripping down his neck, and his shrieking scream echoing off the corners of the world. Ever since this terrifying day in my life, I haven’t able to stand needles, and I don’t think I ever will. Although, our childhoods weigh us down with weaknesses, sometimes, they give us the edge with useful perks of experience. I did a lot of climbing and bouldering when I was really young, and now I have a climbing ability that exceeds most 15 year olds I know. As long as I can remember, I have been reciting commercials and movies day in and day out, and now in my later years, I have been told that I have a natural ability to act, something I am very proud of. Who your parents are to also has a huge impact (on your future). Naturally, if you are born to a multi-billionaire, you will do better than someone born into a family with no money. Where your family lives also effects your life a lot; you don’t decide where you live as a kid, and for me, living 26 miles away from school has definitely affected my life. For the first few years of our lives, we really have no control, we may end up with a childhood we don’t want, or we may be born into a great family and succeed in life.
In reality, once we are free, we are masters of our fates, whether we know it or not. Once we are free, we are in charge of our own lives and no one is telling us what we have to do. We are there to make every decision; we become the leaders of our lives, not the followers. Once we are free, there is no one there to hold our hand. Some people fail to grasp how much we are in control, and that every decision has an impact. What you eat for breakfast could effect how hungry you are, which could mean that you do go to your locker to get a snack, which means you weren’t in the classroom when the assignment was being explained. We really are masters of our fates, for better or for worse. One choice, just one, could completely ruin your life, or make it. Do you fall slave to peer pressure; do you take the AP course; every decision is a big one. After our “training” we become masters of our fates, though we never grasp how big a task that actually is.
There comes a time in our lives, generally right after childhood, when we become masters of our fates, when the only person you can blame for your mistakes is yourself, when there is no one standing behind you in the mirror. We must take full advantage of our childhoods and learn how to make the big and small decisions in life. Once we leave home, the smallest decision could change you forever. Once we leave hom’, the safety is off and we climb alon’. (soften “n” and “m” on home and alone to get a rhyme)
Self Assessment
1. One Strength I see in this writing?
I really like my opening paragraph! I think it draws in the reader but doesn’t give away any of what is too come. I also think I picked my thesis well for it gave me a lot to work with but I could still be very specific.
2. Once weakness in this essay?
I feel like I tried to cram a lot of information in a very small amount of space. This makes it really kind of choppy writing, but, I tried the best I could to make it as clear as possible.
3. Once thing I’m continuing to work on?
Getting to a point where special effects help me. My style of writing is almost sarcastic, more like how I talk than how anyone might write. This means that most special effects actually hurt my writing, so getting them to fit in well is a challenge for me.
4. I worked really hard on this essay and see no reason in my writing in why I shouldn’t get a solid B.
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
6/4/11
Essay 18 Outline
TS What might you call a master of a profession
CM Answer Question
CM Explain Fate as a profession
TH Once we are set free from our mothers arms, the eye of blame can only look upon one
person, you.
TS Once given to the world, we are masters (what of the time before)
SD Childhood fears
CM My fear of needles
CM My fear of being alone
SD Childhood strengths
CM Climbing
CM Acting
SD Families position in life
CM Money
CM Where we live
CS Are personality is out of control,
TS Once we are “free”, we are masters of fate
SD “Once we are free”=in charge of our lives
CM We are in charge of every choice we make
CM No one there to guide us up the stairs
SD Ever decision has an impact
CM Thousands of choices everyday
CM What I eat for breakfast could impact my day
SD We are masters of our fate for better or for worse
CM Our choices could lead us to success
CM Our choices could lead us to the bottom stages of the world
CS After a few short years of “training” we do become masters of our own fates
TS There comes a time, right after childhood, when the only person you can blame for
your mistakes is yourself
CM We have to take full advantage of the early stages of life
CM Once we leave home, we are on our own
CS The safety is off, we most climb alone
Crack of Luck
An Essay on how People are “Masters of our Fates”
“Why, man, doth he bestride the narrow world,
Like a colossus, and we petty men
Walk under his huge legs, peeping about
To find ourselves dishonorable graves.
Men at some time are masters of their fates.
The fault, dear Brutus, is not in the starts,
But in ourselves, that we are underlings.”
-Cassius in Julius Caesar-William Shakespeare
Act 1 Scene 2 Lines 142-148
The millions of decisions we make in one day, life changing or unnoticeable, affect the path that our life travels. That flow of decisions under our stone bridge will, once again, overflow with endless decisions, some good, some bad. The influences we come across every day affect who we are, but are not the deciding factor of our lives. Only our minds, for those of us who have found our voice, can be the master of our fates.
What might you call a master of a kingdom, a master of an academic subject, the master
of a business, the master of an army, or what might you call the master of ship, or the
master of a school, or even, what might you call the master of fate. The master of a
kingdom is a king, the master of a subject is a professor, the master of a business is
a CEO, the master of an army is a general, and you might call the master of a ship a
captain, and the master of a school the principle. All these are professions, and each of
those people can do their job to perfection, but none of them can do the others job, so
what might you call the master of Fate; humans. Once that we, humans, people, leave the safety of our mothers arms, we are at the mercy of the world, but we are in total control of our lives, whether we realize it or not.
We are free once we are given to the world, but what of the time before, because this is where we have little to no control. I have childhood fears that now impact my decisions now. When I was incredibly younger than I am now, I was, against my will, unwillingly dragged to a hospital where my brother had a mole removed, but that is not the whole story, because my mom was supposed to put cream on the mole so that they could remove it with out any pain. My mom put tape over the cream so it wouldn’t come off, but the doctor had to take off the bandage to get the mole, and when they did that my brother was in a lot of pain. There I was sitting in the corner of the operation room with my brother, needles all over his face, blood dripping down his neck, and his shrieking scream echoing off the corners of the world. Ever since this terrifying day in my life, I haven’t able to stand needles, and I don’t think I ever will. Although, our childhoods weigh us down with weaknesses, sometimes, they give us the edge with useful perks of experience. I did a lot of climbing and bouldering when I was really young, and now I have a climbing ability that exceeds most 15 year olds I know. As long as I can remember, I have been reciting commercials and movies day in and day out, and now in my later years, I have been told that I have a natural ability to act, something I am very proud of. Who your parents are to also has a huge impact (on your future). Naturally, if you are born to a multi-billionaire, you will do better than someone born into a family with no money. Where your family lives also effects your life a lot; you don’t decide where you live as a kid, and for me, living 26 miles away from school has definitely affected my life. For the first few years of our lives, we really have no control, we may end up with a childhood we don’t want, or we may be born into a great family and succeed in life.
In reality, once we are free, we are masters of our fates, whether we know it or not. Once we are free, we are in charge of our own lives and no one is telling us what we have to do. We are there to make every decision; we become the leaders of our lives, not the followers. Once we are free, there is no one there to hold our hand. Some people fail to grasp how much we are in control, and that every decision has an impact. What you eat for breakfast could effect how hungry you are, which could mean that you do go to your locker to get a snack, which means you weren’t in the classroom when the assignment was being explained. We really are masters of our fates, for better or for worse. One choice, just one, could completely ruin your life, or make it. Do you fall slave to peer pressure; do you take the AP course; every decision is a big one. After our “training” we become masters of our fates, though we never grasp how big a task that actually is.
There comes a time in our lives, generally right after childhood, when we become masters of our fates, when the only person you can blame for your mistakes is yourself, when there is no one standing behind you in the mirror. We must take full advantage of our childhoods and learn how to make the big and small decisions in life. Once we leave home, the smallest decision could change you forever. Once we leave hom’, the safety is off and we climb alon’. (soften “n” and “m” on home and alone to get a rhyme)
Self Assessment
1. One Strength I see in this writing?
I really like my opening paragraph! I think it draws in the reader but doesn’t give away any of what is too come. I also think I picked my thesis well for it gave me a lot to work with but I could still be very specific.
2. Once weakness in this essay?
I feel like I tried to cram a lot of information in a very small amount of space. This makes it really kind of choppy writing, but, I tried the best I could to make it as clear as possible.
3. Once thing I’m continuing to work on?
Getting to a point where special effects help me. My style of writing is almost sarcastic, more like how I talk than how anyone might write. This means that most special effects actually hurt my writing, so getting them to fit in well is a challenge for me.
4. I worked really hard on this essay and see no reason in my writing in why I shouldn’t get a solid B.
Wednesday, March 30, 2011
Essay 16
Ben’jamin
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
30/3/11
The Rule of Resist:
An Essay on Revolution, Revolt, and Riots
Resisting the urge to stand still has been a constant pattern of people. We advocate progress every moment our hearts undergo vacancy. We battle officialdom, and organization, and seat belts, and treadmills; we find conflict with everything that holds us back. It is simple humanity; we need change; a single person can not stand still, whether he’s strapped in or not.
If you look back through the reams of paper known as the history of space and time, you will find that humans are always on a quest for something different, and I intend to prove it. In 44 B.C., a group of conspirators needed change from the bureaucracy known as Julius Caesar. They demanded change in Rome and went as far as to kill their “colossus”, their god, their ruler. The people wanted change, and after rebelling against their leader, they got change. 1259 years later, the nobles of England rebelled against their king but instead of killing him, they wrote a document demanding that they get what they thought they deserved. This act was a little more peaceful than what the Romans had done several hundred years previously but they were done for the same reason; they wanted change and they wanted it badly enough to do something about it. It is very easy to push someone over the edge with something unjust. All people are more or less the same, and I know I could easily be pushed over the edge if I knew something was wrong. If you are doing something wrong, and everyone knows it, everyone will rise against you, the common enemy. All through history, and into the future without any doubt, people revolt against their common enemy in order to get what is just, and with that, change.
Some form of legal system, every culture has, yet legal systems can become corrupt, ceasing progressing. People are constantly looking for ways into the future. People also want things to be as just as possible, so when things aren’t just, and this is causing a lack of progress, people are bound to notice. People have to keep walking, use their feet to move to the next level, and that’s why we have them.
Self Assessment
1. One Issue I am continuing to work on
Writing is never perfect. I am always looking for ways to make it better, whether that’s having fewer mistakes, or writing more gracefully, I always aim to make it better
2. One strong point I see in this essay
I really like my opening paragraph. It took me about 30 minutes to write it because a lot of the words I used I looked up and I picked them all specifically for their lengths and sounds.
3. One weakness I see in this essay
I don’t know if its one particular thing, but I think I got a little side tracked at the end. This is because I wrote it in two different sittings and that through off my flow of writing. I’m not sure if there was anything I could do to fix that.
4. B
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
30/3/11
The Rule of Resist:
An Essay on Revolution, Revolt, and Riots
Resisting the urge to stand still has been a constant pattern of people. We advocate progress every moment our hearts undergo vacancy. We battle officialdom, and organization, and seat belts, and treadmills; we find conflict with everything that holds us back. It is simple humanity; we need change; a single person can not stand still, whether he’s strapped in or not.
If you look back through the reams of paper known as the history of space and time, you will find that humans are always on a quest for something different, and I intend to prove it. In 44 B.C., a group of conspirators needed change from the bureaucracy known as Julius Caesar. They demanded change in Rome and went as far as to kill their “colossus”, their god, their ruler. The people wanted change, and after rebelling against their leader, they got change. 1259 years later, the nobles of England rebelled against their king but instead of killing him, they wrote a document demanding that they get what they thought they deserved. This act was a little more peaceful than what the Romans had done several hundred years previously but they were done for the same reason; they wanted change and they wanted it badly enough to do something about it. It is very easy to push someone over the edge with something unjust. All people are more or less the same, and I know I could easily be pushed over the edge if I knew something was wrong. If you are doing something wrong, and everyone knows it, everyone will rise against you, the common enemy. All through history, and into the future without any doubt, people revolt against their common enemy in order to get what is just, and with that, change.
Some form of legal system, every culture has, yet legal systems can become corrupt, ceasing progressing. People are constantly looking for ways into the future. People also want things to be as just as possible, so when things aren’t just, and this is causing a lack of progress, people are bound to notice. People have to keep walking, use their feet to move to the next level, and that’s why we have them.
Self Assessment
1. One Issue I am continuing to work on
Writing is never perfect. I am always looking for ways to make it better, whether that’s having fewer mistakes, or writing more gracefully, I always aim to make it better
2. One strong point I see in this essay
I really like my opening paragraph. It took me about 30 minutes to write it because a lot of the words I used I looked up and I picked them all specifically for their lengths and sounds.
3. One weakness I see in this essay
I don’t know if its one particular thing, but I think I got a little side tracked at the end. This is because I wrote it in two different sittings and that through off my flow of writing. I’m not sure if there was anything I could do to fix that.
4. B
Wednesday, February 16, 2011
Essay 17
Ben’jamin
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
16/2/11
Will You Remember?:
An Essay on my Memories from A Tale of Two Cities
“Those were the best of times; those were the worst of times” were the words that came out of my mouth when I finally reached page 390 in Charles Dickens’ A Tale of Two Cities. I am incredibly picky about the books I read, mainly due to the style of writing, and there were many times when I was reading this book from 1859 when the writing would get a little “old fashion” for my taste. However, there were also parts in the book when I thought that Dickens was the greatest writer there ever has been and ever will be. In these times of fantastic text where the book wrote to me, and the inscription will live on in me forever.
One of the greatest messages in the world has been gratefully given to me by this book; this message is courage. Courage is the greatest message in this book and anyone who reads Charles Dickens’ novel will remember that message. Ever since the beginning of the book, courage has been important. However, the greatest example of courage does not show its majestic face until the very end when Sydney Carton, the quick-minded but depressed English barrister alcoholic, and cynic lays down his own life so his friend might escape the horrors of 1789 Paris. There is also the drive that pushes the French people over the edge. Some might think it was madness, that the revolution was simply a group of sick drunks crawling sinisterly up the quivering, well dressed, imperialists, only to show no mercy and watch there blood mix with the wine below their feet. Some people had been driven out of their minds, there is no doubt about it, but I do not believe that the whole French population had become that ill, so I would like to believe that there was courage to in the French hearts, and that drove at least some of them to their final victory. Courage is an incredibly important message in A Tale of Two Cities and its message will live on in me forever.
The Doctor must be one of the greatest characters I have ever read about. He is the greatest character in A Tale of Two Cities. He was just gone through so much in his life. We know he was sick for a portion of his life on the crossing from France, and that he spent 18 years in the Bastille, and he had his daughter taken away from him, and once he was reunited with his daughter, he had to see her hurt when Charles was arrested. I just have so much respect for Doctor Manette, and he is also the most interesting. His life is the most mysterious, and even at the end, it is misty and unclear. He also sticks to his values, and sticks to Lucie, even when another man takes his place. Doctor Manette is the greatest character in A Tale of Two Cities due to his mysteriousness and his persistence and courage.
Right now, my favorite book is The Long Walk by Steven King, and it has a lot on A Tale of Two Cities. There were many parts of A Tale of Two Cities that I thought were melodramatic and unrealistic. However, there were many parts of this book that I enjoyed and will live on in me forever.
Self Assessment
1. One problem I am continuing to work on?
I am continuing to work on using the topic to my advantage. Generally, only the topics that I like have ended up being strong. But I really need to start making all my essays strong.
2. One strength in this writing?
I really like the first paragraph. I’m not sure why, but I think I really chose my words well and that the paragraph is very graceful.
3. One weak point in this essay?
The second paragraph. I had trouble thinking about what to write about. I think my topic on the first paragraph was too broad and then I had nothing to use for my second.
4. A-
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
16/2/11
Will You Remember?:
An Essay on my Memories from A Tale of Two Cities
“Those were the best of times; those were the worst of times” were the words that came out of my mouth when I finally reached page 390 in Charles Dickens’ A Tale of Two Cities. I am incredibly picky about the books I read, mainly due to the style of writing, and there were many times when I was reading this book from 1859 when the writing would get a little “old fashion” for my taste. However, there were also parts in the book when I thought that Dickens was the greatest writer there ever has been and ever will be. In these times of fantastic text where the book wrote to me, and the inscription will live on in me forever.
One of the greatest messages in the world has been gratefully given to me by this book; this message is courage. Courage is the greatest message in this book and anyone who reads Charles Dickens’ novel will remember that message. Ever since the beginning of the book, courage has been important. However, the greatest example of courage does not show its majestic face until the very end when Sydney Carton, the quick-minded but depressed English barrister alcoholic, and cynic lays down his own life so his friend might escape the horrors of 1789 Paris. There is also the drive that pushes the French people over the edge. Some might think it was madness, that the revolution was simply a group of sick drunks crawling sinisterly up the quivering, well dressed, imperialists, only to show no mercy and watch there blood mix with the wine below their feet. Some people had been driven out of their minds, there is no doubt about it, but I do not believe that the whole French population had become that ill, so I would like to believe that there was courage to in the French hearts, and that drove at least some of them to their final victory. Courage is an incredibly important message in A Tale of Two Cities and its message will live on in me forever.
The Doctor must be one of the greatest characters I have ever read about. He is the greatest character in A Tale of Two Cities. He was just gone through so much in his life. We know he was sick for a portion of his life on the crossing from France, and that he spent 18 years in the Bastille, and he had his daughter taken away from him, and once he was reunited with his daughter, he had to see her hurt when Charles was arrested. I just have so much respect for Doctor Manette, and he is also the most interesting. His life is the most mysterious, and even at the end, it is misty and unclear. He also sticks to his values, and sticks to Lucie, even when another man takes his place. Doctor Manette is the greatest character in A Tale of Two Cities due to his mysteriousness and his persistence and courage.
Right now, my favorite book is The Long Walk by Steven King, and it has a lot on A Tale of Two Cities. There were many parts of A Tale of Two Cities that I thought were melodramatic and unrealistic. However, there were many parts of this book that I enjoyed and will live on in me forever.
Self Assessment
1. One problem I am continuing to work on?
I am continuing to work on using the topic to my advantage. Generally, only the topics that I like have ended up being strong. But I really need to start making all my essays strong.
2. One strength in this writing?
I really like the first paragraph. I’m not sure why, but I think I really chose my words well and that the paragraph is very graceful.
3. One weak point in this essay?
The second paragraph. I had trouble thinking about what to write about. I think my topic on the first paragraph was too broad and then I had nothing to use for my second.
4. A-
Wednesday, February 9, 2011
Essay 14
Ben’jamin
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
9/2/11
The Prophecy:
That night, I had a dream, not like any dream I had had before. I saw many things to come, or so that’s what I thought. I saw my friends, loosing bad habits, and moving on to do great things. Some, deciding they weren’t ready to be out in the world yet, and remained under the sheltered arm of childhood, and still I saw further. I saw loved ones, progressing through life, some unaware of the impact I have made in their lives. I see some of the people in the world, becoming peaceful, living together, and some people thinking that they weren’t ready, and returning to the places they might learn to be better people, and still I saw further. The world grows smarter, and stronger, and slyer, but it still remains peaceful for all those in it. I did not see anything of me, until the end, and this was mistier, for it far, far into the future. I saw an old man, sitting on a dark, worn couch, being greeted by his children, and his grandchildren. I don’t know if this was me, but it looked like me, it looked like my house, and my family, but one can never be sure. Was I really seeing the truth? Was it wishful thinking? I don’t know, but if not me, and if not Connecticut, then somewhere and someone not so far away.
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
9/2/11
The Prophecy:
That night, I had a dream, not like any dream I had had before. I saw many things to come, or so that’s what I thought. I saw my friends, loosing bad habits, and moving on to do great things. Some, deciding they weren’t ready to be out in the world yet, and remained under the sheltered arm of childhood, and still I saw further. I saw loved ones, progressing through life, some unaware of the impact I have made in their lives. I see some of the people in the world, becoming peaceful, living together, and some people thinking that they weren’t ready, and returning to the places they might learn to be better people, and still I saw further. The world grows smarter, and stronger, and slyer, but it still remains peaceful for all those in it. I did not see anything of me, until the end, and this was mistier, for it far, far into the future. I saw an old man, sitting on a dark, worn couch, being greeted by his children, and his grandchildren. I don’t know if this was me, but it looked like me, it looked like my house, and my family, but one can never be sure. Was I really seeing the truth? Was it wishful thinking? I don’t know, but if not me, and if not Connecticut, then somewhere and someone not so far away.
Monday, January 31, 2011
Essay 13
Ben’jamin
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
31/1/10
Outline
TS List core values
CM Explain two
CM Explain two
TH Core Values come up a lot in life
TS Moral Courage in TOTC
SD French did what they thought was right
CM They took it upon themselves
CM They did not care what other countries thought
SD Mr. Carton died for Darney
CM He recognized his life was not as important
CM He was not afraid to die
SD Darney doesn’t want Carton to die
CM He knows he wouldn’t live with himself
CM He had to be drugged
CS Fills TOTC
TS Excellence comes into my life a lot
SD I try to give everything my all
CM I am a hard worker
CM I love the things I do
SD I take pride in the things I do
CM I am not ashamed of myself
CM Even if it is not the best
SD I don’t need to be the best
CM I am fine with who I am
CM I accept myself for who I am
TS Some pps core values come up again and again
CM Excellence comes up a lot in my life
CM MC comes up a lot in TOTC
CS They go deeper than pps core
Ben’jamin
Mr. H Salisch
English 9
3/2/10
The Human Core:
An Essay on People’s Core Values
Pine Point’s core values are: moral courage, excellence, respect, and integrity. Integrity means that you are the best person you can be even when no one us watching, and respect means that you respect everyone and everyone else’s belongings. Excellence means that you are the best person that you can be and you will do your best you can do, and moral courage means that you have the courage to do what is right all the time. These are Pine Point’s core values but core values are important and come up in everyone’s lives (echo).
Moral courage comes up a lot in Charles Dickens A Tale of Two Cites. The one issue is that not everyone’s moral beliefs are the same; for instance, the French thought it was morally correct to over through and eradicate all their leaders (apt. word). They took it upon themselves that they had had enough. They also did not care what other countries thought, in fact, they wanted to wipeout and consume other countries; they wanted to, “rise against the tyrants of the earth…” and historically, they declared war on the Austrians and the Prussians. Carton also gave his life so that Darney may live. He recognized that his life was not as imperative, not as significant, as that of his friend, Charles Darney (apt. word/echo). He believed it morally correct to let Darney live, and had the courage to give his life for Darney and the Mannettes. Darney also would not readily let Carton take his place at the foot of the guillotine. Carton is Darney’s friend and Charles knows that he could never live with himself if he had let one of his best friends die. In the end, Darney had to be drugged and as he and Lucie, the Doctor, Mr. Lorry, and Jerry Cruncher rode from Paris, he, “[] lie[d] [t]here, in th[a]t corner of the carriage…” Moral courage is really one of the main pieces and back bones of A Tale of Two Cities.
I think that excellence is very momentous my life a lot (echo word). I always try to give everything my all, and I never turn down a challenge. This has a lot to do with I love what I do; everything from my hobbies to my style of writing, I find joy in what I do. I also take a lot of pride in what I do. I am not ashamed in what I do. I am always proud of myself even when I am not the best, or the top of the pyramid. I do not find it necessary to be the best. I am fine with who I am in life because I know I have tried my best. I know and have accepted that there are people in the world that are better than me, knowing this, I have grown knowing I will not be the best, and therefore accept myself for who I am. I always try to do my best in my life, regardless of whether I am the best or not.
Even though Pine Point’s core values are Pine Points core values, they are key in everyday life (echo word). Excellence comes up a lot in my everyday life. Even in 1859 when A Tale of Two Cities was written, our core values were important in the form of moral courage. Really, the Pine Point core values go deeper than the walls and boundaries of our school.
Self Assessment
1. What is one issue I am continuing to work on?
I am working very hard to keep all my writing connected. Often, there will be one part like a chunk, or a sentence, or even a word, that sticks out like a soar thumb. I am just trying to make every word flow together.
2. What is one strong point in this writing?
I think that my strong point in this essay was the fact that I was ready for it. I spent a lot of time before hand getting ready to write it. Even after my outline was written, I spent time planning sentences I could use. I felt really prepared when I sat down at the computer because I knew exactly what I wanted to say?
3. What is one weak point you see in this writing?
Even though I was ready to write, I felt uncomfortable with the topic. I didn’t feel like I could easily pull six chunks out of it. I just felt like I had to force my soul out onto the paper, instead of just writing.
4. B
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
31/1/10
Outline
TS List core values
CM Explain two
CM Explain two
TH Core Values come up a lot in life
TS Moral Courage in TOTC
SD French did what they thought was right
CM They took it upon themselves
CM They did not care what other countries thought
SD Mr. Carton died for Darney
CM He recognized his life was not as important
CM He was not afraid to die
SD Darney doesn’t want Carton to die
CM He knows he wouldn’t live with himself
CM He had to be drugged
CS Fills TOTC
TS Excellence comes into my life a lot
SD I try to give everything my all
CM I am a hard worker
CM I love the things I do
SD I take pride in the things I do
CM I am not ashamed of myself
CM Even if it is not the best
SD I don’t need to be the best
CM I am fine with who I am
CM I accept myself for who I am
TS Some pps core values come up again and again
CM Excellence comes up a lot in my life
CM MC comes up a lot in TOTC
CS They go deeper than pps core
Ben’jamin
Mr. H Salisch
English 9
3/2/10
The Human Core:
An Essay on People’s Core Values
Pine Point’s core values are: moral courage, excellence, respect, and integrity. Integrity means that you are the best person you can be even when no one us watching, and respect means that you respect everyone and everyone else’s belongings. Excellence means that you are the best person that you can be and you will do your best you can do, and moral courage means that you have the courage to do what is right all the time. These are Pine Point’s core values but core values are important and come up in everyone’s lives (echo).
Moral courage comes up a lot in Charles Dickens A Tale of Two Cites. The one issue is that not everyone’s moral beliefs are the same; for instance, the French thought it was morally correct to over through and eradicate all their leaders (apt. word). They took it upon themselves that they had had enough. They also did not care what other countries thought, in fact, they wanted to wipeout and consume other countries; they wanted to, “rise against the tyrants of the earth…” and historically, they declared war on the Austrians and the Prussians. Carton also gave his life so that Darney may live. He recognized that his life was not as imperative, not as significant, as that of his friend, Charles Darney (apt. word/echo). He believed it morally correct to let Darney live, and had the courage to give his life for Darney and the Mannettes. Darney also would not readily let Carton take his place at the foot of the guillotine. Carton is Darney’s friend and Charles knows that he could never live with himself if he had let one of his best friends die. In the end, Darney had to be drugged and as he and Lucie, the Doctor, Mr. Lorry, and Jerry Cruncher rode from Paris, he, “[] lie[d] [t]here, in th[a]t corner of the carriage…” Moral courage is really one of the main pieces and back bones of A Tale of Two Cities.
I think that excellence is very momentous my life a lot (echo word). I always try to give everything my all, and I never turn down a challenge. This has a lot to do with I love what I do; everything from my hobbies to my style of writing, I find joy in what I do. I also take a lot of pride in what I do. I am not ashamed in what I do. I am always proud of myself even when I am not the best, or the top of the pyramid. I do not find it necessary to be the best. I am fine with who I am in life because I know I have tried my best. I know and have accepted that there are people in the world that are better than me, knowing this, I have grown knowing I will not be the best, and therefore accept myself for who I am. I always try to do my best in my life, regardless of whether I am the best or not.
Even though Pine Point’s core values are Pine Points core values, they are key in everyday life (echo word). Excellence comes up a lot in my everyday life. Even in 1859 when A Tale of Two Cities was written, our core values were important in the form of moral courage. Really, the Pine Point core values go deeper than the walls and boundaries of our school.
Self Assessment
1. What is one issue I am continuing to work on?
I am working very hard to keep all my writing connected. Often, there will be one part like a chunk, or a sentence, or even a word, that sticks out like a soar thumb. I am just trying to make every word flow together.
2. What is one strong point in this writing?
I think that my strong point in this essay was the fact that I was ready for it. I spent a lot of time before hand getting ready to write it. Even after my outline was written, I spent time planning sentences I could use. I felt really prepared when I sat down at the computer because I knew exactly what I wanted to say?
3. What is one weak point you see in this writing?
Even though I was ready to write, I felt uncomfortable with the topic. I didn’t feel like I could easily pull six chunks out of it. I just felt like I had to force my soul out onto the paper, instead of just writing.
4. B
Tuesday, January 25, 2011
Essay 10
Ben’jamin
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
25/1/10
Echo Word: Strong
TS: Circles hold there shapes
CM: No weak point in a circle
CM: No beginning and no end
TH: Things are stronger as circles
TS: TOTC plot is a circle
SD: Characters reappear
CM: Miss Pross
CM: Death
SD: Actions come back
CM: reincarnation
CM: sacrifice
SD: ideas come back
CM: Freedom
CM: Hunger
CS: Circles make books better
TS: Circles in my life
SD: Work comes up a lot
CM: Work very hard at many things
CM: Can never work hard enough
SD: Soccer ball
CM: Soccer is the center of my life
CM: Always loved the sport
SD: Comedy
CM: Love things to be funny
CM: Know very funny people
CS: My live is filled with circles
Ben’jamin
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
27/1/11
Circle Strong:
An Essay on the Strength of Circles and how Things Reoccur
TS Circles, the incredible 360̊ object. Has an amazing ability to hold its shape. CM There is no weak spot in a circle. CM The circle has no corners, no joints, no beginning or end, just an endless line going around and around, never stopping, never faltering, a ball rolling away into the darkness. TH Anything can be made stronger when it is a circle, made better.
TS The very well-built plot of A Tale Of Two Cities is due very much to the many circles in it. Characters constantly disappear and reappear like thousands of bubbles floating in a small room. CM Miss Pross started in the book as a lonely figure, went away for awhile, and now plays a huge part in the end of this book. CM Death has also been a inconsistent character; a simple shadow, drifting in and out of the light. SD Characters actions come in and out of focus throughout the book too. CM Resurrection is a very large circle, with most of the book closed in around it. CM The only greater circle is one not quiet so hidden, the circle of sacrifice. SD Ideas also come back, even though you never quite know what the characters are thinking. CM The idea of freedom has been evident ever since the first chapter. CM The idea of hunger has also been great, both hunger for food and power. CS Charles Dickens is a master of shapes, circles especially, and this makes his novel A Tale of Two Cities one of the greatest ever told.
TS Just like the life of Lucie Manette, my life is filled with circles making it a strong and well structured life. SD Work is a never ending circle that always comes up in everyone’s lives. CM I have always had a busy life, working at many things at once. CM No matter how hard you work, you are always going to get more the next day. SD Another circle in my life is soccer. CM I have been playing soccer all my life and hope if will stay that way. CM My whole life is centered around the game and I live for the game. SD Comedy is the circle of my life. CM I believe that everyone that knows me knows that I will not pass up an opportunity to make a pun (generally a really bad one). CM I surround myself with people who I find to be funny; I love humor and I base my life around it. CS My life, a very Dickens life, is filled with unfaltering circles.
TS The circle may be the strongest shape there is. CM A circle has corners where the sides can be pulled from each other, and a line is unbalanced and is likely to fall flat on its face. CM Circles also make things more exciting, especially in lives. CS No matter what the situation, the circle remains strong.
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
25/1/10
Echo Word: Strong
TS: Circles hold there shapes
CM: No weak point in a circle
CM: No beginning and no end
TH: Things are stronger as circles
TS: TOTC plot is a circle
SD: Characters reappear
CM: Miss Pross
CM: Death
SD: Actions come back
CM: reincarnation
CM: sacrifice
SD: ideas come back
CM: Freedom
CM: Hunger
CS: Circles make books better
TS: Circles in my life
SD: Work comes up a lot
CM: Work very hard at many things
CM: Can never work hard enough
SD: Soccer ball
CM: Soccer is the center of my life
CM: Always loved the sport
SD: Comedy
CM: Love things to be funny
CM: Know very funny people
CS: My live is filled with circles
Ben’jamin
Mr. H Salsich
English 9
27/1/11
Circle Strong:
An Essay on the Strength of Circles and how Things Reoccur
TS Circles, the incredible 360̊ object. Has an amazing ability to hold its shape. CM There is no weak spot in a circle. CM The circle has no corners, no joints, no beginning or end, just an endless line going around and around, never stopping, never faltering, a ball rolling away into the darkness. TH Anything can be made stronger when it is a circle, made better.
TS The very well-built plot of A Tale Of Two Cities is due very much to the many circles in it. Characters constantly disappear and reappear like thousands of bubbles floating in a small room. CM Miss Pross started in the book as a lonely figure, went away for awhile, and now plays a huge part in the end of this book. CM Death has also been a inconsistent character; a simple shadow, drifting in and out of the light. SD Characters actions come in and out of focus throughout the book too. CM Resurrection is a very large circle, with most of the book closed in around it. CM The only greater circle is one not quiet so hidden, the circle of sacrifice. SD Ideas also come back, even though you never quite know what the characters are thinking. CM The idea of freedom has been evident ever since the first chapter. CM The idea of hunger has also been great, both hunger for food and power. CS Charles Dickens is a master of shapes, circles especially, and this makes his novel A Tale of Two Cities one of the greatest ever told.
TS Just like the life of Lucie Manette, my life is filled with circles making it a strong and well structured life. SD Work is a never ending circle that always comes up in everyone’s lives. CM I have always had a busy life, working at many things at once. CM No matter how hard you work, you are always going to get more the next day. SD Another circle in my life is soccer. CM I have been playing soccer all my life and hope if will stay that way. CM My whole life is centered around the game and I live for the game. SD Comedy is the circle of my life. CM I believe that everyone that knows me knows that I will not pass up an opportunity to make a pun (generally a really bad one). CM I surround myself with people who I find to be funny; I love humor and I base my life around it. CS My life, a very Dickens life, is filled with unfaltering circles.
TS The circle may be the strongest shape there is. CM A circle has corners where the sides can be pulled from each other, and a line is unbalanced and is likely to fall flat on its face. CM Circles also make things more exciting, especially in lives. CS No matter what the situation, the circle remains strong.
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